So this time I am going to copy and paste my work, because iv'e been doing giving the link to you guy more than 2 times. So I dicied to switch it up a little bit. Just keep in mind it is not finished.
Give me helpful statement the comments.
We finally arrived at the big clock tower suburb, there are millions of tall buildings that you can visit. In the background there are many things like beautiful trees, bright blue sky and many people having the best time of their lives. While eating scrumshis and delicious food, with people playing sports.
There is this giant tree that can fit over one-hundred people, here are some peoples reactions. “Oh Hello um a this tree is lovely for shade I think it is great! The second person is now going to talk. “Good morning, hello, “ What is your thoughts of this giant shade?
I will update it when it is finished.
Hi Nathan,
ReplyDeleteI liked how you have started your story. There is lots of descriptions and you have also included paragraphs. I also liked how you have included people's reactions. Maybe include the picture as well so that we can see what your prompt was.
Thank you for the comment Mrs.Ghosh
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